Evaluation

Media studies a2 coursework the evaluation from D Banger




Here is the evaluation I completed for my coursework production regarding the short film Intrusion and all its ancillary tasks. 

'Intrusion' Final - Draft #4

This is the 4th, and final draft I have completed for Intrusion. Overall I am happy with this draft and took on board the improvements that were given to me for my 3rd draft.

I re-shot the opening scene with the characters talking and discussing the safe, because my teacher didn't allow me to upload the other cut because it contained sensitive material which was a consequence of me filming in a wrong location. Therefore I re-shot the whole scene to meet a new environment, but set the same back-story and context, and following the same script.

I also added in the credits for this draft, to make it look more professional and also more of a complete short film . I used very similar typography to the title sequence for my credits, to make Intrusion flow more and seem like more of a coherent piece with continuous themes and styles.

Another improvement I had was I needed some kind of thrilling, non-diegetic soundtrack when one of my characters woke up to a noise and was investigating. Therefore I did this and now the scene seems to me more thrilling. I used an eerie piece of soundtrack I found from the internet, which was royalty free, and thought it was very suitable for my short films tone and agenda.

Intrusion Poster Ancillary Task- Draft #4 - Final (Minor Changes)

This is the 4th, final draft of the poster ancillary task for Intrusion. It is essentially the same as the previous draft, however the text at the bottom of the poster is now in a more conventional, standardize font known as 'Trajan'.

I was told to make this change by my teacher, to make the poster look slightly more professional and conventional, since all conventional posters will feature text font somewhat exactly like this one.

I also made the tag lines and review sentences a tiny bit smaller, this was just to make the title of 'Intrusion' stand out just that bit more, so it is clearer and more visible to the audience.

Overall I am relatively satisfied with this poster, and think it is simple. but considerably effective in putting across the themes and mood of Intrusion across to the audience, through visual semiotics and text.

Film Review Ancillary Task- Draft No #3 - FINAL

This is the final draft of the Intrusion poster ancillary task. Some notable changes between this draft and the 2nd draft include changing all images on the review to black and white, to maintain and continue synergy between this review and the poster. changing the font to also match the other products same font, and also adding in 2 page numbers on both sides of the review.

The images are all now black and white, to create a continued theme and synergy between the other ancillary task, being the poster, and also the short film itself. Before, the images were in full colour, which didn't quite match the synergy among the other products, so I thought it would be better to change them to a black and white colour scheme, to get a continued sense and tone of bleakness and psychological-thriller esque emotions,

I also had to change the main title of 'Intrusion' to a different, 'Chiller' font, which is the same as the the one in the poster. This is once again for continuity and synergy reasons as different fonts wont make for as effective combinations of ancillary tasks. It also very much more suits the tone and atmosphere of the review, since the other main colours are red, and the black and white imagery make it very suitable.

The page numbers are also in the bottom corners of both sides of the film review, to create a more professional looking review, and to truly make it look like it belongs in a magazine, taking up one large A3 page.

Overall I am fairly happy with my final draft of film review and think it has made good, appropriate developments and changes over time, to create a respectable looking film review ancillary task.

Final Audience Feedback Survey

Here is the link to my survey I have created. Unfortunately I can't embed it into this blog post due to technical reasons that are out of my control.


https://www.surveymonkey.com/r/K3MZSW5



The questions are all related to my short film, and will give me understanding on some of the strengths and weaknesses with the short film. I've also asked them to rate their opinion of the film, from a scale of 1-10. This is just so I have an idea on how good people actually thought the short film was. Another thing I did was ask them about certain conventions and technical aspects of the film, regarding what they thought was the best and what they thought needed the most improving. For example editing, camerawork, mise-en-scene, direction, plot and so on. This was particularly helpful for me as it would later enable me to find out what was and wasn't so good about the short film, and if I were to return to it in the future, I would have the means to improve it.

NEW Script- Adapted for Draft 4

This is a new script I have made that is for draft 4. Given the fact that I had to change the opening scene, I wrote in a new sequence in a car somewhere mysterious, with the same 3 characters. The rest of the short film will play out the same as draft 3 overall.

[Scene 1]

(In a car, dark environment)  (Slow techno music in the background)

Man 1: Alex I heard you have a free house on Saturday is that true?

Alex: Uh yeah man

Man 1: Oh right can we do like a little gathering or something?

Alex: We could do but we’d have to keep it quite low key, because my dad put a safe upstairs, from all the jewellery from Sunny’s wedding

Man 1: Oh. We better be invited yeah (Looks slightly above the camera)

Alex: Yeah man off course, course

(End of scene 1, diegetic music slows down)

[Title sequence]

Atmospheric horror music begins to play, non diegetic

AB18 Studios Present

Intrusion

(Scene 2)

Two masked thieves are walking towards the camera and

they stand still and stare forward at something

Man two pulls out a corkscrew

Man two clenches his fist

Both of them walk across the road to the house, and walk to the gate

They begin to break into the gate and remove the lock from the door

They kick down the gate and pick the lock from the back door of the house

Man 1: We need to go upstairs to the safe

Man 2: Yeah let’s go

(Scene 3)

Non-diegetic moody, ambient music changes to similar music, but slower and darker

They begin to walk to the stairs, once reached they stare up into the darkness at the top of the stairs  

Once up the stairs, they open the door leading to the safe

They open an additional door in which the safe is presumed to be

[Scene 4]

Non-diegetic music stops playing

Straight cut to Alex in bed hears a loud bang 

Alex: What was that?

Thrilling-horror like score sounds

Alex walks over to the room, and peers round the corner

He then slowly walks over the to slightly open door

Man 1 pulls him into the door

Cut to a shot of man 1, holding the candle to his face (editing changes to a red threshold/added filters to change the colour) (It’s actually a nightmare of Alex’s)

Alex wakes up from the nightmare and breathes heavily from the nightmare; he then looks to his right

The two men are standing there, man one has a knife in his hand, and he then lunges forward and presumably kills Alex

Film cuts with midway action of man 1 stabbing Alex

Credits begin to play out

Directed by Ashley banger

Staring Aayush Joshi

Starring Ashley Banger

and Alex Patrick-Smith

Edited by Ashley Banger

Story by Ashley Banger

Director of photography Benoit Ganesan

Produced by Jamie Gerrish

Intrusion Draft #3 - Completion and Filming Issue- UNABLE TO UPLOAD

I have recently completed my third draft of Intrusion. I re-shot several things and made a new edit, tackling main previous issues such as the lighting and mise-en-scene being too dark upstairs, shots cutting to black unnecessarily etc. I also filmed a whole new sequence which takes place in school, and involves the 2 thieves talking to the victim about a new safe his dad acquired in his house. This new footage and new edit made my 3rd draft of Intrusion come to a total of 4 minutes. In addiiton to this, the new draft 3 was filmed using a new set of storyboards, which I completed a few weeks ago.

However, I had a considerable problem in this draft which is why my teacher didn't give me permission to upload the draft to this blog post. In a couple of my shots, there was confidential teacher/student data displayed on the walls and on some desks, and for this reason my teacher wouldn't allow me to upload the draft online due to data protection associated reasons. This was quite silly of me to do as I should of thoroughly checked the mise-en-scene and content of the room before filming, and then I could have prevented this mistake. Therefore, I will be re-shooting the opening scene in a different environment, but staying with the same script and overall direction of the scene. This is so that I can get the same purpose introduction, but just with different location and mise-en-scene.